Although the changes made are subtle, these changes help further clarify the different points of view of the piece. I think that using solid colors for the vector work was a great step in the right direction. The solid colors are more creditable, more believing. They say formally that I am making a firm stake and stating my opinion. I think that it was very smart to create division title pages between each point of view, however I believe that the copy could be changed within your title page to enhance the positive/negative aspect to the piece. Right now, Adam is advocating that local produce is not always the best opinion however local schmocal does sound positive, it is negative, so it is setting me up to believe that this is another negative commentary. Another thing, I think that you could stay on these title pages for a bit longer and perhaps the color could flood the page instead of the black, to further emphasize the points of view. The color contrast is a bit harsh. The black hole pointing to the red vector cover over the fruits is to dramatic, just lose this. Also, I think that when you are talking about the number of people helped by the system Whole Family Microcredit Program you should start with what would happen if it wasn't in existence and then.... more to come.
... tell me how much it has helped the individuals instead of the other way around. That scene is just a wee bit confusing. Anyway, yah for you guys! You produced a great project that you should both be proud of.
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Although the changes made are subtle, these changes help further clarify the different points of view of the piece. I think that using solid colors for the vector work was a great step in the right direction. The solid colors are more creditable, more believing. They say formally that I am making a firm stake and stating my opinion. I think that it was very smart to create division title pages between each point of view, however I believe that the copy could be changed within your title page to enhance the positive/negative aspect to the piece. Right now, Adam is advocating that local produce is not always the best opinion however local schmocal does sound positive, it is negative, so it is setting me up to believe that this is another negative commentary. Another thing, I think that you could stay on these title pages for a bit longer and perhaps the color could flood the page instead of the black, to further emphasize the points of view. The color contrast is a bit harsh. The black hole pointing to the red vector cover over the fruits is to dramatic, just lose this. Also, I think that when you are talking about the number of people helped by the system Whole Family Microcredit Program you should start with what would happen if it wasn't in existence and then.... more to come.
... tell me how much it has helped the individuals instead of the other way around. That scene is just a wee bit confusing. Anyway, yah for you guys! You produced a great project that you should both be proud of.
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